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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to regularly watch television whether at home or school. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #television #home #school
There are some opinions about
effects
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 of
television
 on
children
's education. Some
people
 think that
this
 is useful for
young
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 generation's perception,
while
 in others'
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minds
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mind
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 there is more negative effect than positive. I agree with
second
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 group of
people
.
Firstly
, parents can't control TV's content. There would be any kind of content that
not
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is not
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 intended for young
people
. You can say that there is a way to limit
children
's watching time. But you can't control your
children
 for 24 hours and 7 days a week. When watching TV becomes a habit,
children
 will do it anyway.
Furthermore
,
television
 can limit
children
's creativity and imagination. When young
people
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 a book, they can imagine what is happening in their mind. But when they just
watching
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 it, they just see
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the imaginated
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imaginated
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imagined
 result of
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the story
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 by someone else.
In
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 the other side, for
children
 who
has
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difficultuies
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difficulties
on
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with
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 perception, it could
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affect
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positively
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them positively
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. When they see what is happening in
process
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the process
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, they will understand better,
instead
 of just reading information.
Moreover
,
television
 can expose
children
 to different cultures and perspectives. It can be more beneficial when they are watching it at
schools
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school
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. Because there is special
contents
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content
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 for school
television
.
To conclude
, preventing
of
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apply
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wathcing
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watching
 TV would be more efficient for
young
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the young
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 generation. Because of
future
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the future
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result
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results
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 of
lacking
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a lack of
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 imagination
on
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
Instead
, they should read more books
for
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to
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 expand
worldview
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their worldview
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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