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theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there are many
companies
 that produce a huge variety of things and they underline that their
products
 are new because there is a lot of competition. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
companies
 use advertising to improve their product and I will say the pros and cons of development. One of the first reasons is that almost all people have a smartphone and
this
 permits
companies
 to send emails or messages about their
products
 and push the consumers to buy them.
Furthermore
, the same things are done by other industries and to try to sell like new it must find new solutions.
For instance
, if we look on the net there are a lot of smartphones
such
 as
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the Iphone
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Iphone
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iPhone
, Samsung and other devices apparently all equal but they have different functions, in
fact
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 industries use advertising to inform people about the potential of smartphones. In my opinion,
this
 is a positive approach because it permits
to
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one to
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 discover new
products
. Research shows some negative developments because sometimes it
happened
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 that some businesses sell false
products
 or they
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that
is
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the best things
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 never been used.
For instance
, Two years ago one of the most important international
companies
 in Japan, was investigated because they said their brand was new but it wasn’t true but many people
like
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 to buy it because was cheaper and good. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays is very important to use advertising to improve
their
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 visibility of your
products
 because It can lead
a
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lot of advantages.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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