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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#minutes #week #flight #london #plane #bag #hotel #airline #contents #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I was on a
a
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flight to London,
departure
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the departure
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 was New York and the number flight was HF4H5JK and
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 I lost my
bag
. I
figure
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figured
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 out that I lost my
bag
 already on the hotel that
I've
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I had
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 been
.
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 I've never ever
have
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been in a situation like
this
, so I do not know how to proceed in
this
 case that's why I'm writing
this
 letter to
you'll
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. My
bag
 is
Prada
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a Prada
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bag
 and it has
a
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brown
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in color
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color
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 with black bullets,
in
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on
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side
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the side
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 that
bag
 has my laptop and
fly
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flight
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 back ticket to London, my charges
was
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 on there, charges used on my phone, laptop and tablet. It had a wallet with $200 (two hundred in cash). Please contact me to solve
this
issue
 as soon as possible because
I'm not stay
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 too much here in London. I'd already been
in
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to
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 the police and they asked me to contact with guys to solve
this
issue
 as soon as possible, they said that they'll work with
you'll
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. To solve
this
issue
 as soon as possible I'm able to contact you and provide all
kind
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 of
informations
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 do you want to solve
this
issue
 quickly. Best Regards.
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coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs to improve coherence and readability.
task achievement
Provide more details about the bag and its contents, such as its size and any distinguishing features.
task achievement
Use a more formal and professional tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
Add more specific information, such as the date and time of the flight, to provide a complete response.
grammatical range and accuracy
Proofread your letter for grammatical errors.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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