Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

It is argued that
people
attempt to explore
space
only to foster the dignity of their
nation
rather than building
a
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good relations with other countries. I totally agree with the statement and there will be huge changes in the future.
To begin
with,
space
exploration nowadays focuses more on the pride of the
nation
. Some countries try their best to go to outer
space
to find a wonderful invention related to
space
.
This
is simply because they want to show that they have the advanced technology to reach
space
and are able to create something new. Take China as an example, which
claim
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that they already
explore
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space
and because of that they are able to find an invention which is a new sun. It is obvious that they just want to show their sophisticated technology since we already have the real sun. Having said that, I do believe that in the future
people
can have access to
space
even though it is still impossible now.
In other words
, since
people
now have a high level of curiosity about the
condition
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in
space
, they probably will find a way to go there. They would create massive means that can bring huge amounts of
people
to
space
.
As a result
, exploring
space
may become a regular occurrence and even more can become a favorite tourist destination. All in all, it is undeniable that in
this
era
people
pay more attention to
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the level of pride of a
nation
when exploring
space
rather than contributing to create something that can benefit not only
for
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their
nation
but
also
for
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all of the nations on the earth.
Moreover
, going to outer
space
probably will become
an
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usual activity in the future.
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