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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipement that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter . Describe the problem with the equipement . explain how this problem affecting to your work. .say what you want the shop or company to do

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I am writing to express my concern about the issues that I am currently having with a laptop, which I bought from you
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 month. what seems to be
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 to me is the fact that the laptop overheating. As I see it, the root cause of
this
 problem might be fans not working properly. Another issue that
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 inconvenience
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 the speed of the CPU is not sufficient
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 the mentioned issues, I am not able to perform
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 job tasks effectively. starting with the fact the computer is overheating, it shuts down unexpectedly during times. the results in a massive data loss during compiling a file. the compiling time that the computer needs to finish one file is unbearably long
due to
 the fact that the CPU is defective. I must urge you to replace the mentioned item as soon as possible as the problem is adversely affecting my work
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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