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The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him. Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter . Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party . Explain why you won't be able to attend the party . Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear Mr and Madam Collins I hope to find you well. I thank you for inviting me to Chris's birthday. Certainly, surprise would be the most effective action for everyone. From my point of view, Chrise would be so happy when he face
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 a birthday celebration lack of knowing about it, is so wonderful.
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, he consistently wants to have it. I mentioned to you,
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 date, I have a crucial interview for
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 for it a long time.
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 miss it immediately. So, I apologize to hear that cannot participate in your event. Certainly, I am going to hold a friendly party for Chris in our friend's cafe` after your celebration, by reason of, I do not want to spoil your surprise. I hope
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 with each other is what I want for you. Yours sincerely Souri
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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