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Fresh water has always been a limited resources in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, and what measures can government and individuals take to respond to this problem.

#water #resources #parts #world #demand #measures #government #individuals
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 a growing headache in the world and it is becoming a global catastrophe. There are some causes of the increasing
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 to the trouble. One of the ideas could be
water
 export from the
countries
 where
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 situation is the best. It means if a country like Lithuania has big resources of
water
 they could export to other parts of
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the world
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 where
water
 is in demand. There are many
countries
 which have enough fresh
water
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 to solve
this
 problem could be
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 decision. Talking about individuals. it is
also
 an opportunity to save, not waste
water
 which we can use for living. Usually, we do not think about saving white gold (so it is called in
countries
 where are
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 enough
water
).
according to
 scientific
researches
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 after 10 years it will be
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trouble
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torble
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especially
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especially
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Africa
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countries
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 would like to state that there is no magic bullet and
summerizing
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 everything up we all should know that we live in one world and we should share our resources.
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