Chevening is looking for individuals with strong professional relationship-building skills, who will engage with the Chevening Community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Please explain how you build and maintain relationships in a professional capacity, using clear examples of how you currently do this, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future. (500)

I would say a differentiating factor that sets me apart is my proven ability to actively seek, build, and maintain strong professional relationships within not only my local
community
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but with others across the world. Korea is highly homogenous where over 97% of the population is ethnically Korean. Realizing
this
, I actively pursued opportunities to enhance my exposure to multicultural environments. I applied for the Global Teacher’s University (GTU) program at my university and was selected as a successful candidate several times. When I was a sophomore, I was selected as a trainee for the University of Hawaii at Manoa. It was here
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I began to network with others from different countries. I showed that I could offer value and a fresh perspective.
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, more importantly, I showed that I truly cared and
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connect on a deeper level. In my view, having compassion,
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, and making a true effort to understand people’s perspectives and goals
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critical to strong professional relationships. Recognized for my global perspective and networking capabilities, my professor gave me funding to conduct
research
on Southeast Asia. As a team, we conducted
research
on the Singaporean education system where I took the lead in establishing relationships with educators in Singapore through virtual methods. The professor was impressed by my efforts and extended my funding for
further
research
. In my junior year, I conducted
research
on the diplomatic relationship between Vietnam and Korea. In my senior year, I was offered a chance to volunteer in Uganda on a
research
trip. Unfortunately, I had a conflict, but I believe the recognition and continued opportunities showcase my ability to connect with different cultures in physical and virtual environments. Within my workplace, I continue to bring
this
perspective to educate others.
This
year, I organised a global club at my school, one with teachers, and the other with students. In the teachers’ global club, I facilitated discussions on global topics. Sometimes, we watch movies or musicals to form a deeper understanding of other countries’ cultures. In the students’ global club, I taught them to understand different cultures and how to show respect. We experienced other countries’ cultural aspects. My school’s principal was highly satisfied and commended me as it brought the
community
together.
Moreover
, I continue to empower my
community
. I presented on the topic of Innovation at school to my teachers because I led a successful strategic initiative (Green Smart School) previously. I
also
worked with city hall and set up city-sponsored bicycle classes for the local
community
.
Finally
, I’m an active participant in the “smart edu-tech” teacher’s
community
to discuss and think through what education in the future could be like. These are just a small sample of the kinds of initiatives I would hope to leverage my skills for in the future. My goal is to have the opportunity to scale my impact and be a positive global ambassador to inspire children and adults alike when it comes to education and opportunity.
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Ensure your essay directly addresses all aspects of the prompt. In this case, you have provided a clear explanation of how you build and maintain professional relationships, but you could have further emphasized your current practices and provided more specific examples.
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Your use of language is generally effective. Aim for a wider range of vocabulary to further enhance your essay. Additionally, make sure to consistently use formal language throughout.
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Your grammar is mostly accurate, but there are a few instances where you could have used more varied sentence structures and avoided some repetitive phrases.

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