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Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, and explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experience and your plans for the future. Please enter new information and examples here and not duplicate the information you have entered on the work experience and education section of this form. (500)

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The MA
Education
 offered at King’s College London University is my second choice. With
this
 course, I can develop a critical understanding of educational policies by drawing on contemporary research. I am drawn to the fact that I can choose Comparative
Education
, Child Health and Development, and STEM
Education
 which I really desire to study.
Moreover
, I prefer
this
 course because it provides innovative technology so that students experience elements of digital learning. MSc
Education
 offered by the University of Southampton is my third choice. I chose
this
 course because I can get a chance to analyse the challenges facing
education
 and how regional, national, and international policies can impact teaching and learning. In 2020, luckily I was granted a working holiday visa and I made my bucket list to do in London
such
 as eating Eton Mess and Flapjack, watching musicals in the West End, and visiting the Notting Hill Bookshop.
However
, before the flight, I was denied entry from my layover in Vietnam, because of Covid. I won’t forget how disappointed I was, and I wanted to get a second chance. Any of the three universities mentioned above would help me to maximise my potential to be a great change-maker in the field of
Education
 in Korea.
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