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There is a traffic problem in your area. Write a letter to the council. Describe the traffic problem What is the reason behind this What should be done foe this

#traffic #area #council #reason #foe
Dear sir, I am Gurpreet Singh a resident of Abdullapur Chuhane district Sangrur.
Iam
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I am
 writing
this
 letter to
council
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the council
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 about the
traffic
 issues in my hometown. To commence with, In
temporary
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the temporary
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era
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 there are so many
traffic
 problems like
as
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noise pollution and waste of
the
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fuel . We see in every city in
traffic
 jams during
this
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these
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 issues people blow the horn
for
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to
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 save
the
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time so that noise pollution is increasing
as well as
 brain stress problems.
Secondly
, most
of
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the
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youngsters prefer fuel vehicles
go
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one
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from one
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 place to another place.it is
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a totally
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totally
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 waste of money and they can not save money.
Furthermore
, the major reason
of
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 the
traffic
 issue is road space. In big
cities
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 tool taxes are available so that people use single roads as compared
highways
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to highways
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.
In addition
, the
increaseing
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increasing
 number of stray animals are roads
aslo
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also
 the reason behind
traffic
congestions
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congestion
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.
Government
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 should
be
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cut down hafty
tooltax
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tools
from
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on
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highway
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highways
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then
masses
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the masses
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 prefer more space
roads
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on roads
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 and
traffic
 lights provided by authorities on every road if
that
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people follow these
light
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lights
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and
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traffic
 jams would
be reduce
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be reduced
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 automatically.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Gurpreet
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Ensure that all the required points are addressed in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Improve the coherence and cohesion by organizing the information in a more logical manner and using appropriate linking words.
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Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise words to convey your ideas.
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