Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.
While
some people
believe that some professionals , such
as doctor
and engineers, should Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
work
in the country
that
they receive education, others think that they can Correct word choice
where
work
wherever they want and this
is their option. This
essay will argue both sides of the arguments
and explain why I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
argument
people
should work
at
least more than Change preposition
for at
one
year in different country
to improve themselves.
On the Fix the agreement mistake
countries
one
hand, people
think that they are making investments to
the Change preposition
in
people
who take an education from universities with their taxes. Moreover
, governments shift their investments from some cruticial
areas from Correct your spelling
crucial
critical
military
to healthcare Correct article usage
the military
for
sustain Change preposition
to
people
’s higher education. Because of this
reasons, Correct determiner usage
these
people
believe that these people
should payback
these investments to the Correct your spelling
pay back
country
with involving
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involvement
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in
Also
, when they go abroad for working
, they will not pay taxes which reduces total governments’ income Change preposition
to work
that
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and
effect
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affects
others
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others'
other's
life
.
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lives
On the other hand
, others think that people
have a right to chose
whatever they want and no Wrong verb form
choose
one
can not restrict anyone’s carier
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career
carrier
with
pushing them to Change preposition
by
work
in a specific location. In addition
to that, they believe when people
move to other countries for work
, they can gain more knowledge from experts and they can spread these informations
to their colleagues after Change the wording
information
pieces of information
turn
back to their Change the verb form
turning
country
. This
can improve both production and innovation in industries. From an
another perspective, if Remove the article
apply
government
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the government
let
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lets
people
free about
to choose workplaces, it means Change preposition
apply
also
the countries will receive people
from different locations which drive
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drives
economy
in Add an article
the economy
good
way. Change the article
a good
For instance
, the USA one
of the most powerful Add a missing verb
is one
country
in the economy because Fix the agreement mistake
countries
they
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it
received
thousands of Wrong verb form
receives
well educated
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well-educated
people
from all around the world and they join to
the workforce.
In conclusion, both arguments have their own merits but from my Change preposition
apply
perpective
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perspective
people
should gain different expertise and expand their vision with
working in different countries. After that, they can Change preposition
by
turnback
to their own places to spread Correct your spelling
turn
these wisdom
to improve society from different aspects Change the determiner
this wisdom
otherwise
they will stuck in the narrow expreince
and knowledge.Correct your spelling
experience
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