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2.Most agree that we should be training children to recycle wastes to preserve the Earth’s natural resources. However, some believe that parents should teach their children to recycle waste while others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#children #wastes #earth’s #resources #believe #parents #waste #schools
The name of my
city
 is
Krasnodar
. It is the
southest
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most south
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center
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centre
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 of
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the russian
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russian
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Russian
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regions
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region
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 so
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the climat
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climat
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climate
 here is hot and humid
especial
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especially
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 in the summer. But the
automn
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autumn
 and springtime are very warm and comfortable. There is snowing here usually just several times
for
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apply
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the
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a
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 year. Architecture in
Krasnodar
 doesn’t have
own
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its own
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 style and system. There are many small
cotteges
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cottages
cottage
 near the high
buldings
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buildings
. For the
big
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large
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quatity
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quantity
 of small
houses
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houses,
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 the
city
 is so sprawling – about 30
killometres
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kilometres
 amount different parts of the town. All official organizations are in the
center
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centre
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 of
Krasnodar
 so
this
 part of
city
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the city
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 is
awfull
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awful
awfully
 congested. The air and the river in
Krasnodar
 are polluted
for
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because of
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 problems with canalization and cars. A lot of people from all
Russia
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over Russia
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 move here because they guess that local life is easier. But
price
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the price
a price
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on
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of
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 accommodation and
grossery
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grocery
 is one of the most expensive in the country. Despite of
problems
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problems,
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Krasnodar
 has some beautifull places:The park
Krasnodar
 –
modern
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a modern
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 and
amaizing
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amazing
 point of the
city
, The Japanese garden –
new
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a new
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 location with
bizzare
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bizarre
 trees, The Botanic garden –
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a quite
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quite
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quiet
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 and calm place
fo
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to
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 relax, The Krasnaya
street
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Street
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 – vibrant territory popular among artists and young people.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling
  • Natural resources
  • Preserve
  • Waste management
  • Environmental responsibility
  • Sustainability
  • Habits
  • Eco-friendly
  • Role modeling
  • Lifelong behaviors
  • Structured education
  • Curriculum integration
  • Critical thinking
  • Ecological awareness
  • Collaborative learning
  • Systematic approach
  • Reinforcement
  • Community involvement
  • Governmental initiatives
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