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Nowadays a lot of buildings such as offices and schools are being built an open plan design. Why is that? Do you see this as a positive or negative development?

#buildings #offices #schools #plan #design #development
Modern workspaces were created in order to meet
people
’s wants and
need
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needs
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.
It is clear that
 easier to make discoveries in a group of
people
 with constant discussions.
That is
 why many companies and schools try to create
such
 places where all
people
 would sit in the same big room, so let us understand all
pros
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the pros
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 and cons of
this
 type of place and why it is so popular. Personally, I am convinced that open spaces provide many opportunities to workers. First and foremost, keeping in touch with
you
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your
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 colleagues or students is the best way to do
you
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your
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 task better and quicker. If you have any questions, just ask for help and your problem
would
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will
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 be resolved in a blink of an eye.
Moreover
, it is great to stay in
this
 busy environment when somebody learning math, somebody preparing
to
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for
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 their exams with friends. All these things motivate others to work harder because your environment
do
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 not just beat around the bushes, so
open plan
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open-plan
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 design is
the
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a
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 great investment in
people
’s productivity.
However
, crowded workspaces,
such
 as schools and
office
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offices
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is
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a very stressful and noisy
place
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places
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 to work on something.
Introvert
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 especially feel bad in a group of
people
 because not everyone
got
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gets
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 used to
be
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being
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 in
such
 a social environment where you need to communicate more
that
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than
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 always.
Thus
, it needs to be said that working together is great, but not shoulder to shoulder with each other. Many
people
 do need to work alone in
calm
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a calm
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 atmosphere. All in all, every person is different and
open-spaces
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open spaces
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 may be not the best for all
people
, but obviously advantageous for many students or workers
due to
 the absence of communication borders. You can make new connections or just
to
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find somebody who had the same problem recently.
That is
 why
people
 in general it is profitable for
company
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a company
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 or school and for workers too because of the mentioned advantages.
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