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The charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008.
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In the pie charts, it
illustates
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illustrate
 the percentages of
cummunites
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communities
community
 spending their money in different sectors(housing, food, clothing, travel,entertainment and luxury goods) in a European country in the year
of
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1958 and 2008.
Overall
,
compare
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compared
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 to 1958
peoples
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people
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spend
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spent
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 more money on
buiding
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building
 houses. travel and luxury things. in 1958, people
spends
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spent
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 22% on housing
whereas
, it
increses
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increased
 to 32% in 2008.in
term
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terms
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 of luxury
product
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products
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, mob
they
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apply
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follow
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followed
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 an upward trend they rose to 17% which is two times higher
compare
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compared
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 to 1958.in 1958, rabble
spents
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spent
spends
 only 8%
for
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of
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 travel even
then
, in 2008 the number
increses
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increased
dramticaly
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dramatically
 to 17%.
on the other hand
, in 1958, people
spend
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spent
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 32%
for
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on
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 food
whereas
, they only
spend
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spent
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 12% in 2008 which is almost three times less.There is a slight change in the
propertion
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proportion
 of clothing it becomes 18% to 16% respectively. In the number of entertainment,
their
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there
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 is a
significent
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significant
decrese
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decrease
 from 13% to only 8%.
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