Your friend from oversea is coming to visit you next month. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Tell them what they need to bring Tell them what they will be doing during the time they are visiting Warn them about somethings that might be challenging

Dear Sarah, I'm so happy to receive your email that you and your family are
finally
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to Toronto
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Toronto
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to visit me next month. I am writing to tell you about
the
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future plans during your stay and
also
give you some advice. December, the month that you’ll be here, we’ll have heavy snow as you know probably. So bring some warm clothes and suitable boots. Don't forget to bring gloves. we'll be going to build a snowman at a festival which
be
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settled in our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. As I mentioned above, right after the first snowfall, there will be a Snowman Festival in London Park. I believe it will be enjoyable
especially
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for your children. we will
also
go
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skiing in Edmond
village
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which is one of the best ski resorts in the country. I know that you and your husband ski professionally. And
finally
, I will book some tickets for the final match of the hockey tournament. It will be held in the central stadium and after the match, we can celebrate with the winner's fans who will stay
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streets
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and bars until midnight. There are some challenging things that I want to tell you. First of
all
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we might get stuck
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home after the snow, so be ready mentally for that. Don’t worry I will store some necessary stuff like canned food and water. I
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suggest changing your money
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your home country because all the currency exchanges here get extra fees as a tax. If you need more information, do not hesitate to contact me. Best wishes, Sahebe
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coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing could be more formal for the context of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to enhance coherence and clarity.
task achievement
Use a more suitable writing tone for a letter to a friend, considering the level of formality and friendliness.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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