The main purpose of public librabries is to provide books and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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todays

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era, everything is upgraded

day-by-day

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. Some people

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that the priority of public

librabries

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libraries

is to serve books

instead

of digital

media

such

as Videos, DVDs and Software.

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of knowledge where people can get everything whatever they want. In my opinion, I

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with

this

given statement and

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will elaborate

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arguments in the

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paragraphs. To commence with, one of the most significant

reason

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is that, in

recent

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era, every people should know about the new

technology

as now not only the exams

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by computers but

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intervies

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interviews

interview

are

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taken by high-tech

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, it is enormously help

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children who belongs to poor family, they can not afford

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expensive equipment. To put

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in simple words,

learnere

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learners

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can use

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from

public

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library

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and upgrade

theirself

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themselves

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, during the lockdown, all

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went to online classes and

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computers at that time city libraries

were allow

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to use

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pupils.

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, they were

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their study. Another supportive argument is that

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it is

best

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that one can complete their work

with in

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deadline

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and without time waste.

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, there are hundreds of books on the same topic which made it difficult to decide the best.

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can use the computer and they provide all the information which

made

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easy to select

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one. In

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, it is

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librarian

libraries

librarians

to keep digital data

instead

of manual, so they do not need to remember everything. On

the

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close scrutiny, I conclude that

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library

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should provide expensive hi-tech

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as it is very helpful and

necessity

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all

age

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of human

being

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as now everything is

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inculding

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including

study, data, information and

job

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. It would be

fruitfull

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fruitful

for all individual who can not

purchasing

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this

costly equipment so if

local

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government provide

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aminities

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amenities

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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The main purpose of public librabries is to provide books and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?