today, many people do not know do not their neighbours on large cities. what problems does this cause what can be done about this?

Nowadays,
people
have a big
problem
with
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the person
a person
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who lives in large
cities
,
that is
bad relationships with any
people
living around them. Any
person
lives
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who lives
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in an apartment building but does not know and always
stay
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stays
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at
home
,
do
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does
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not hand out to find neighbours. a big
problem
is happening in large
cities
but do not have
wat
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a way
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to cope.
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writer will give some of
way
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ways
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can
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that can
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be done
that
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problem
. In large
cities
,
person
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the person
a person
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at
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of
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all age will
age will
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have thinking like
stay
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staying
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at
home
because when they hang out, must
careful
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be careful
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with
car
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the car
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and some
of
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apply
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bad
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the bad
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cases so they will stay at
home
all day to
safe
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be safe
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, but that
problem
each
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happen more at 10 years old or under 25 years old.
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many reasons, but now the main reason may be smartphones which
child
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children
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or students at university, secondary or primary must have,
have
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may
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many
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ways to have it but
in
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at age funny things like games, videos,
take
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taking
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a photo or chatting with
friend
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friends
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and do not hang out.
With any
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that
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thinking,
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thinking
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they will stay at
home
and never go out and if they do out, they must have smartphones.
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knowledge
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the knowledge
a knowledge
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of
scientist
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scientists
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in America, over the
world
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world,
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have90%
person
have
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and use
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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in their life. Want decrease that case all families in large
cities
must give for child to study about have neighbors live around them.
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,
have
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a book was written by
person
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a person
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who live
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live
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lives
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in Germany, he writes about
one
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a
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boy
do
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who does
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not have one neighbor because all day he stays at
home
and thinks like he scare
people
live
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apply
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around him because he ever
talk
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talks
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with them. At
last
, he died but never
have
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had
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one neighbour
besides
. In conclusion, because
social
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will ride and it
do
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does
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not stop,
according to
that will have dunny thing will
born
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bear
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so
people
will be attracted with it but must know point stop and give up their life.
Instead
of
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apply
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, will make more neighbours
to do
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apply
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not think disadvantages in their
life
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lives
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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