you have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that we booked by the organiser of a company. write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include, details about the meeting, the problem you face and what should be done.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
email to complain regarding the hotel that I stayed in to attend our
conference
meeting with one of our valuable clients. Please allow me to explain. As we are aware
this
conference
meeting with the CEO of SVB bank is very imperative for our business to maintain our reputation and seek new businesses in various fields associated with
this
company. Unfortunately, I am not satisfied with the facilities that were offered to host
this
meeting to impress our client. I know that you had booked a special
conference
room with the multimedia facility on the rooftop to experience the beautiful ambience
as well as
seek the attention of
this
company to invest with us.
However
, the hotel manager informed us that he could not allow us to use that room because of renovation work.
Finally
, we ended up hosting
this
meeting in a different room with no access to television or a computer to share the presentation which we prepared with pertinent data. I was frustrated because of the inconvenience because of the lack of access to any facilities that are required for
this
imperative
conference
. I would request you to contact the hotel manager and request a full refund
as well as
acknowledge
this
would never happen in future. I am looking forward to hearing your response at your earliest convenience. Thank you, Yours sincerely, Jeevitha. S
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear introduction, development and conclusion. Your three paragraphs seem to blend the details of the meeting and problem with the required action.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively throughout the letter. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be improved.
task achievement
Fully address all three points in the task by expanding on the details of the meeting, the issues faced, and the action you want taken. It would help to separate these elements clearly.
task achievement
Maintain a consistently formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding any informal language or expressions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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