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Academic- Task 1 The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The
pictires
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pictures
 illustrate, what
is
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 the current
paln
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plan
pain
of
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 the airport and the final
apparence
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appearance
 of the airport after the redevelopment
in
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next year. Looking from
and
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overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the amount of gates going to be double with an expansion and the existing
walk way
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 will be replaced
bby
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by
sky
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a sky
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 train. A fresh car park will be added
at
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right
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 side of the plan.
Additionally
, some new buildings will be some inside the terminals.
To begin
 with, in the existing plan, there is one "departure and arrival openings.
However
,
according to
 the future
paln
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plan
plans
, it is going to double in
the
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amount. There is a new shop will be opened in the next year,
depite
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despite
 the security
pasport
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passport
 control and passport control customs at the same location. The checking will be
replaned
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replaced
replayed
replanted
 to the opposite of the current placement
while
 establishing a new bag drop at
former
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 check-in location.
Further
, there will be
a
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two cafes opened at both Departures and Arrivals
terminal
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instead
os
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a
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one.
Moreover
, the ATM and a car park can be observed after the development at the Southeast corner. The walkway with 8 gates
which
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is going to expand by introducing a sky train with 18
number of
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gates.
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Task Response
Task Achievement: The candidate has included a variety of features from the diagram and has attempted to illustrate changes and make comparisons. However, the response sometimes lacks specificity, and detail is occasionally either inaccurate or unclear. To improve task achievement, the response needs to include more precise information clearly differentiated from the current layout to the future layout without confusion for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The candidate's response shows an attempt at organization but lacks clear logical progression in places. Sentence structures are sometimes confusing, and paragraphing could be utilized more effectively to distinguish between the description of the current and future plans. To improve coherence and cohesion, focus on creating a more structured response with clearer connections between ideas and use of paragraphing to guide the reader through the response.

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