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You work for an international company,and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. write a letter to your manager.in your letter explain why you want to work in the companys hear office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Manager, Having been working for many years in your reputed company ,I would request you to grant me
the
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permission to work from Head office for six months.
To begin
 with, my sister works for a well-known company in Hyderabad,based on her work her client is expecting her to work from the office to coordinate with
team
 members.Since
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she hasn't been far away from home earlier, I would like to accompany her during her business trip. As many of our
team
 members operate from different locations ,I believe working from another country might not be a big problem for the
team
 .Apparently , though the timezone of the country where I am planning to travel is different, I assure you that I will always be available on call. Considering my request, can you please help in providing
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access to my laptop from the security
team
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 Will be waiting for your reply, Yours Sincerely, Vikram Kallem.
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structure
Ensure that the letter has a clear and logical structure - begin with an appropriate greeting, follow with paragraphs dedicated to each point mentioned in the task, and close with a suitable sign-off.
cohesion
Use cohesive devices to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs effectively, ensuring that the letter flows well.
organisation
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea as per the instructions provided, keeping the content relevant and organized.
task completion
Fully address all parts of the task, providing a more detailed explanation and justification for the request, along with a more thorough plan for how your work can be continued in your absence.
tone
Maintain a consistently appropriate tone throughout the letter; it should be formal and polite, reflective of the letter's purpose and the relationship between you and the recipient.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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