Some people believe that higher education should be funded by the government. Others, however, argue that it is the responsibility of individuals to fund their higher education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A group of individuals present the view that the
government
should pay for the members of the
society
to obtain higher qualifications,
whereas
others believe that expenses for higher
education
need to be paid by
people
. I strongly agree with the former opinion. On the one hand, some
people
justifiably argue that higher
education
should be free. There are numerous
people
who are unable to continue their studies
as a result
of financial problems.
Therefore
, if the
government
pay for higher
education
, the number of
people
who follow their studies at a higher level will soar. So,
firstly
, individuals would be able to pursue their interests and find better job opportunities.
This
not only influences the
people
's standard of living but
also
brings much
profits
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to the
government
.
secondly
, the crime rate can be reduced and the money which is spent for rehabilitation or imprisonment can be allocated to other infrastructures in the
society
.
On the other hand
, another group of
people
claim that the
government
should not spend funds on higher
education
.They firmly insist that all the members of the
society
should be benefited equally from the governmental funds.
For example
, investing in transport infrastructure or enhancing amenities around the cities can be used by the majority of ordinary residents.
However
, I do not find
this
argument convincing as paying for
education
at higher levels may not be seen as effective for a sizeable number of
people
, but it can have several positive effects in the long run.
For instance
, increasing the number of qualified doctors or engineers and
thus
.improving the quality of healthcare systems or buildings.
To conclude
, in my view, it is
people
's right to study higher
education
for free since it can open the door to a
society
that has
higher
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standard of living for the whole citizens.
Moreover
, by paying everyone for their expenses, they encounter issues and may not continue
the
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study
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and
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would have adverse effects on the country.
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