The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Dear John, Thank you so much for agreeing to take care of our beloved cat Fluffy

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we are away for the holiday. Our flight is on the 22nd of December, and we are going to be back on the 4th of January. I’m going to prepare his portable carrier, toilet and packages of feed by our front door for your convenience. Fluffy loves good company and

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free to pet him as much as you want, he almost never scratches or bites anyone on purpose. His diet includes two meals a day with wet feed at 9 am and 6 pm.

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, leave the bowl with water and another with dry feed for him. I usually clean his toilet every other day.

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, if you can ask you to water the plants on the window twice a week and bring home the parcels from the post deliveries once they are at the house porch. Thank you again for the help that you so generously offered! On the weekend after our arrival, we are inviting you for

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dinner at our place! Yours, Vitaly

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Topic Vocabulary:

elderly, senior
emerging technologies
wisdom, maturity, seasoned
agility, nimble
entrepreneurial spirit
innovativeness
adaptability
mentorship, guidance
succession planning
diversity, inclusiveness
risk-taking, calculated risks
demographics
intergenerational
knowledge transfer
organizational renewal
challenges, drawbacks

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The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family at the same time.what problems can this create?what are the possible solutions?

Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough physical exercise .what do you think are the causes of this ? what solutions are there to this problem ?

Nowadays many people believe that in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?