some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species pf plants and animals.Others say that there are more important envirounment problems. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a dilemma between people who think
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that the main threat
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environment
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is decreasing the particular species of
plants
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,
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other
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believe that there are more important
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.I believe that there
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important
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environmental
problems. There are various reasons why people believe that in order to
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environment
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,
firstly
we should maintain the
animals
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plants
,
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if we lose the wild
animals
the population of other
animals
like
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rabbits
will grow and
that is
a big disease for agriculture
furthermore
the amount of o2 which the first factor for living is produced, is different between species of
plants
considering that
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responsible to preserve the variety of
plants
.
On the other hand
,there are some important
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nature,
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of them,named
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activities. Which
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to
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wastes as long they cannot be recycled for
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support
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the population of
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individual
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they have to destroy the forests and mountains to build new cities,
also
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of cities lead to produce more fumes which
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known
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reason to destroying
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layer, by losing ozone all
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creatures
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will be in
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situation. In conclusion,there is no doubt about
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of protecting
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species of
plants
and
animals
and how
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roles are vital for
preserve
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environment
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but the
wight
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of other problems is really more, people and government might
to
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cooperate
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each other to help
this
subject.
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