You have moved in new house and you are going to throw a part which we be little noisy and invite your neighbors

Dear Mr. Sharma, I hope
this
letter finds you in radiant health and best of the spirits. My
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Reet Kaur, your neighbor. I am writing
this
letter to inform you about a
party
that I am going to celebrate my first marriage anniversary which will be very noisy. Next Saturday, I have planned a surprise
party
for my husband in a new house. To make it memorable, I have invited my close friends and a few relatives.
Additionally
, I decided to decorate the whole house with fresh flowers which are done by well-known artists of our city, khandecrorators.
Also
, Almost 50 people will attend
this
party
at night, we will serve fresh juices and some snacks,
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cake-cutting ceremony will be around 7 pm. After having a delicious dinner, all will dance on the dance floor. I apologize for
this
noise. Come to my place with all family and suggest to me, if you have a better idea or something that we could do better. Again,
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apologize for the disturbance. Hoping to see you in
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and hope you will enjoy it. Yours lovingly, Reet
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The letter covers the essentials of the task but could be enhanced by a more thorough development of the main points, such as providing specific examples of how the noise will be managed or the duration of the party.
coherence and cohesion
While the overall structure is logical, the information could be better organized into clear paragraphs, each with a specific focus, to aid the reader's understanding. Additionally, transitional phrases should be used to create smoother connections between sentences and ideas for improved coherence.

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