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A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Thank him/her for the invitation Explain why you cannot come Ask him/her about other times to visit Write atleast 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear________.

#friend #lives #country #holiday #invitation #times #visit #atleast #addresses #dear________
Dear John, How are you , buddy ? It's been an eternity since I
last
 spoke with you ,Hope you are doing well.
Firstly
, I want to thank you for inviting me to your place for Christmas Celebrations.I
extremely
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really
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 miss the delicious cakes made by your mother on the next day of the festival.It's been a long time
I
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since I
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have been to your place. Unfortunately, I cannot attend your event
this
 year since my parents want me to be at home . As you are aware my grandmother has been ill for a very long time,and she wishes to celebrate
this
 festival with family members ,so my uncles who are living in
States
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the States
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 are making up for
this
 event. After
Christmas
Add a comma
Christmas,
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 I am planning to move to Europe for my higher education . I am free in the month of January as schools in Europe generally start in February.Let me know if
this
 works for you so that we can spend some time before I leave. Hoping to hear from you soon Yours lovingly, Vikram.
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greeting and closing
Ensure that the greeting and closing of the letter are formal and appropriate for the context.
logical structure
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single idea per paragraph
Maintain a single central idea in each paragraph for better coherence and easy readability.
complete response
Fully expand on each bullet point provided in the task to fully satisfy the task achievement criteria.
suitable writing tone
Use a consistent and appropriate tone throughout your letter to maintain task suitability.
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