the bar diagram shows Expenditure of two countries france and uk on consumers goods in 2010.

the bar diagram shows Expenditure of two countries france and uk on consumers goods in 2010.
The chart shows the expenditure of two countries on
consumers
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consumer
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goods in 2010. The unit of measurement is
Pound
sterling .
Overall
, both the countries spend huge
amount
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amounts
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of
money
for
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on
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cars
while
france
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France
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and
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the united
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united
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United Kingdom
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kingdom
spend
low
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the low
a low
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amount
of
money
in
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on
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cameras
and perfume respectively . As
it
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apply
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can be seen
that
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apply
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, United
Kingdoms
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Kingdom
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spend the
higest
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highest
amount
of
money
i.e 45000
Pound
sterling
in
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on
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cars
whereas
,
in
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on
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cars
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cars,
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france
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France
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spend only 40000
pound
sterling . Almost 37000
Pound
sterling was
spend
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spent
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on computers by
france
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France
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whereas
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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spends
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spent
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35000
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35000-pound
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pound
sterling .
In addition
,
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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second
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the second
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higest
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highest
amount
of
money
in
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on
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books i.e 40000
pound
sterling
while
france
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France
show examples
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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ony
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only
30000
pound
sterling .
Secondly
, the lowest
amount
of
money
spend
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spent
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by both countries
are
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is
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perfume and
cameras
. United
kingdoms
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Kingdom
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spend less than 15000
pound
sterling
in
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on
show examples
perfume
while
france
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France
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spends 20000
pound
sterling .
France
spends
its
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a
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lower
amount
of
money
for
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on
show examples
cameras
while
for
cameras
Correct article usage
the united
show examples
united
Correct your spelling
United Kingdom
show examples
kingdom
spend more than 30000
pound
sterling.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pound, amount, money, france, kingdom, cameras with synonyms.
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