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The graph compares the number of people who visited 5 attractions in Parkvale city between 1996 and 2016.

The graph compares the number of people who visited 5 attractions in Parkvale city between 1996 and 2016.
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This
 line chart illustrates the count number of
tourist
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tourists
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 which are provided
the
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with the
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 trend
five
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in five
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 places are; where located in Parkvale city from 1996 to 2016
To begin
 with, the majority
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of tourist
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tourist
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tourists
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 was
visit
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visited
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 place in national gallery
from
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in
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 the second year observed
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase.
Otherwise
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at
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in
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 the first
year
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year,
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 the
aquum
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aquarium
 was the place
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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most people loved
but
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,
however
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but
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, they
become
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became
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a
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apply
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quile
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quite
quilt
 empty
at
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in
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 the next following years. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that
museum
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the museum
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 was started in 1989 by about
above
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apply
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400
thousends
, the
tourist
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tourists
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was
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were
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 stable visiting within the spam. Art is the lowest
visitors
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number of visitors
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 in 1989 but, it
gradual
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gradually
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clime
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climb
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 to its peak
is
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in
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 2004 was just below 400
thousends
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thousands
thousand
 as similar
as
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to
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visitor
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the visitor
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count
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counts
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 in 2016. Zoo and gallery
have
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had
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 the
sam
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same
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atraction
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attraction
attractive
 mood in 1989 which
visitor
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visitors
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 were approximately 300
thousends
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thousands
thousand
. But
then
 it
become
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became
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opposite
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the opposite
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 which the gallery
was
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had
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 the highest
visitor
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number of visitors
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 in 2004
while
other
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the number of visitors reduced to about 100
thousends
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousends with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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