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The diagram illustrates main changes that have occurred at West Park Secondary School over a thirty-year period and its proposed development in 2010.

The diagram illustrates main changes that have occurred at West Park Secondary School over a thirty-year period and its proposed development in 2010.
#changes #west #park #school #period #development
The pictures
are
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present the major transformations at
School
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the School
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 of West
Park
 Secondary
throughout
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over
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 60 years.
Overall
, houses that
exist
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existed
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 in 1950
had been
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were
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 demolished and the
school
 building had a
remain
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 position,
at
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in
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 the east, from 1950 until 2010.
Firstly
, in 1950, there were 3
row
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rows
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 of houses in the west of
school
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the school
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.
Moreover
, farmland
located
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is located
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 in
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the south
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south west
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south-west
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 of
this
 picture,
also
 there
was
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is
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playground
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a playground
the playground
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 in the
south east
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southeast
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. Move to the next 30 years, in 1980, all of the houses had been replaced by car
park
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parks
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 and science
book
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books
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.
This
 science library
were
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was
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an
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apply
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expand
Wrong verb form
expanded
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 from
main
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the main
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 building of the
school
.
Furthermore
,
farmland
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the farmland
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 had been changed into a
school
 facility,
sports
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and sports
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 field. One of the features
had
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that was
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 unchanged
the
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in the
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 location was
playground
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a playground
the playground
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. In the
last
 time of the period,
car
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the car
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park
 had been expanded to almost part of the east,
while
 the sports field had been minimized in the south between
car
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the car
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park
 and playground. The remaining features,
school's
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the school's
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 main building, science book, and main road
were
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apply
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stay
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stayed
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 in the same position.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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