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Some people say that advertising is extremely succesfull at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Marketing is a very important aspect of any brand sales.
However
, marketing
advertisements
 are ignored by consumers, if they are not in search of the posted
product
.
According to
 me,
advertisements
 will always be an integral part of a company's success.
This
 essay will discuss both views.
Advertisements
 of a
product
 among the middle-class family have always been the source of major income for many businesses.
For example
, a
product
 named Scrub Daddy made its headline through Shark Tank, which is now selling washing scrub to about 60
percent
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 of US market consumers. Their major advertisement was done through a television show.
Furthermore
, many companies do not need paid promotion to sell a respective
product
.
For instance
, car companies like Rolls Royce and Lamborghini do not believe in advertising any of their cars. As
,
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 they believe that people using
such
 cars do not waste any time watching television. They tend to get their sales by keeping their
product
 reputation and
such
 kind of no marketing.
Whereas
 ignorance towards
advertisements
 is not a new thing in
this
 world. People are more fond of the things that are necessary to them.
For instance
, if a person wants to buy a new phone
then
 there are very great chances of him focusing on
such
 mobile ads, rather than entertaining any kind of skincare
product
. In regards to
this
, many great influencing platforms like YouTube and Twitter are using
such
 a
persuading
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 technique. They
take
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 permission from device owner to use their applications to show them their interests.
Therefore
, they can promote their platform and business to the targeted audience. In my opinion,
advertisements
 will always boost sales of a
product
. As many companies are focusing on artificial intelligence to manage content and
advertisements
 to make a more personalized experience for
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consumers.
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coherence cohesion
You should ensure a clear structure in your essay, consisting of an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should begin with a clear topic sentence. Make sure to develop paragraphs coherently, with clear transitions between ideas to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
In responding to the task, it's crucial to address all parts of the prompt. You should discuss both views given and substantiate them with specific examples. Ensure your opinion is clear and expanded upon. Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points of the discussion and stating your opinion clearly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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