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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - explain why you want to take time off work - give details of the amount of time you need - suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#company #time #work #manager #amount
Dear Mr. Kadek, I hope you are doing well. I am writing a letter to inform you that I will
to
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take some
day
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days
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 off in a few days. Received a special birthday gift, my family gave me a ticket
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for traveling
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traveling
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 to Singapore, it was a big dream to visit the country and
also
 I have a friend who worked
at
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there, so we will meet when I
arrived
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. I am taking annual leave
4
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days, from 20 to 24 January. During
in
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my vacation, I had prepared who will
covered
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 my job,
therefore
 I
hand
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 over my job
with
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 Alief, he will assist you when you need help
about
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 my daily routine in
office
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.
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, he
also
need
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 your advice when something
happened
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happens
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 and
update
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 some
project
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 if our client
want
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 to
revision
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. I thank you for your attention and I hope there is no problem as long as I am
in
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 holiday. Best wishes, Putra
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure the starting and ending of the letter follows the conventional formats for formal correspondence.
Logical Structure
Provide a logical flow of information and maintain a consistent structure throughout the letter.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph should deal with one specific idea, which was generally met, but ensure clarity and development of each point.
Complete Response
Address all parts of the task with sufficient detail and provide reasons for your requests in a clear and relevant manner.
Suitable Writing Tone
Use a more formal and polite tone throughout the letter, appropriate for correspondence with a manager.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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