In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?
Recently more people
tend
to buy their needs Wrong verb form
have tended
such
as groceries, garments, appliances, and so on, from grand shopping malls
. The consequence of their desire to
Change preposition
for
this
kind of shopping has been presented with closure
of more local small stores day by day. In Add an article
the closure
this
letter
I argue the negative aspects of Add a comma
letter,
this
development
for
, before turning to the positive ones and I believe the positive aspects are more significant than Change preposition
apply
negatives
.
In some individual's Correct article usage
the negatives
mind
, the closure of local Fix the agreement mistake
minds
shops
appears with gross changes in society. In other words
, their claim is the positions of owners turned to employee
. Fix the agreement mistake
employees
However
, these changes may assume positive
Correct article usage
a positive
in
first impression, we should not forget the fact that the Change preposition
apply
existing
of small Replace the word
existence
shops
create
competition among service providers, which Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
usually
tailored to the needs of consumers. Add a missing verb
is usually
For example
, in the past local shops
, due to
their owner’s authority, place
some Wrong verb form
placed
discount
to draw more attention to their business. Needless to say, the change in folk's position from employer to employee Fix the agreement mistake
discounts
take
their power to control the prices and Wrong verb form
took
this
change ended to
higher costs for Change preposition
in
costumers
.
Correct your spelling
customers
In
the flip side, by developing more shopping Change preposition
On
malls
, the opportunities for more entertainment besides
shopping are provided. Moreover
, most of the shopping malls
have been equipped with different facilities, playground
for kids, cinemas, and so on, to impact on consumer’s wellbeing Fix the agreement mistake
playgrounds
besides
shopping. Furthermore
, shopping in huge malls
would be helpful to waste fewer
time on shopping. They usually contain different variety of stores from groceries to different brands of Correct quantifier usage
less
attires
, which help every individual to Fix the agreement mistake
attire
buys
all the Change the verb
buy
stuffs
without Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
commute
between several locations. Wrong verb form
commuting
In addition
, these malls
are spring
up with lots of new Wrong verb form
springing
career
for society.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
careers
although
the development
of big shopping centers
Change the spelling
centres
was
affected lots of small local Unnecessary verb
apply
shops
and anchors
them to closure, I assume Wrong verb form
anchored
this
development
as
a positive Correct your spelling
is
development
from consumer's
view.Correct article usage
the consumer's
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coherence cohesion
You should ensure that the essay has a clear and logical organization of ideas. Aim for a clear progression from introduction to conclusion, with coherent paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should be clearly defined and reflect the overall stance on the issue. The conclusion should succinctly summarize the main points.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific and relevant examples. Vague statements can detract from the overall effectiveness of the argument.
task achievement
Ensure the essay fully responds to all parts of the task prompt. Each point should contribute to addressing whether the development is positive or negative.
task achievement
Ideas should be clear and comprehensive, allowing the reader to follow along easily without confusion. Avoid overly complex or convoluted sentences.
task achievement
Use specific examples to illustrate your arguments. General statements without concrete examples weaken the persuasive power of the essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example