Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

Language
is a very special thing that we humans have incredibly
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and
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so
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that it is the single thing that
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us
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non-intellegent
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non-intelligent
beings back
then
.
However
, the same can not be said today as technological advancement
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been getting through
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developments that it now could do languages as we human does it, and with it, rose an argument that since machines could store and
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extract
basically any information from any
language
, we, especially our younger ones, don't need to shed a sweat learning a new
language
as the machine could do it for us. But, I do not agree
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, as it puts our human most
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aside and disrespectfully
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our ability
on learning
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new things. Machines, backed with huge databases and
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flow of
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, are basically a word bank for any
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that is
present in the world, and with it, we could harness the power of translation
in
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a click of a button. Ever get lost in a foreign country and you want to ask for direction? Do not fret, just open up
google translate
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and type in what you want to ask in the search box.
While
it is extremely helpful, we should not leave the process of learning a
language
just because we have tools to help us.
This
is especially true for children, as completely leaving the process of learning any new\
language
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their mother
language
could make them reliant on technology and will make them unprepared for the diversity of languages outside their home country.
Thus
, learning a new
language
is always relevant and can never be replaced with any translation services. Children
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to learn new
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and not be reliant
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technology to assist them in their multicultural journey.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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