Food travels thousands of miles from farmers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for our environment and economy if people consumed locally produced foods. To what extent do the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?
Thanks to modern technology and development in transportation facilities, shipment of food ingredients has become much easier. As some opine consuming domestic
foods
is more environment friendly in addition
to being economical, I suppose this
point of attitude goes a long way.
On the one hand, some foods
cannot be cultivated everywhere. Indeed, for cultivation
of any kind of crops, three necessary factors are really necessary; fertilized soil, enough water and light. Add an article
the cultivation
For instance
, there are some difficult environments, like Africa, where people may suffer from starvation because of lack of precipitation and drought. This
difficult environment poses a threat to mankind. So, by transporting foods
and essential crops all around the world, Africans can have a
comfortable accessibility to a wide variety of Remove the article
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foods
.
On the other hand
, locally
agricultural products are more affordable. To clarify, in the process of transportation of food from some remote places several stages like storing and packaging must be followed properly. Change the word
local
Otherwise
, these materials may lose their nutritional values
and Fix the agreement mistake
value
being
affected because of not appropriate wrapping. In order to handle Change the verb form
be
aforementioned
mechanism, a great amount of money should be spent. Correct article usage
the aforementioned
Consequently
, the price will increase significantly. However
, all of these extra costs can be eliminated provided that people consume locally produced foods
. Moreover
, so seriously has supporting small and medium size farmers financially affected some individuals’ attitude that they strongly believe purchasing fresh and natural ingredients from the local is a good approach to contribute in
economic development and employment.
In conclusion, Change preposition
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although
transportation
of food may be vital for some regions because of geographical and climate reasons, I strongly believe that Add an article
the transportation
reasonable
price of available crops cultivated locally and Correct article usage
the reasonable
provide
job opportunities for natives encourage us to place a high value on regional farmlands.Wrong verb form
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