Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should a learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some
people
think learning a foreign
language
is the only factor to use in work or travel to other countries, but
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believe that it is not only for that reason,
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but it also
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has many great
befenits
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benefits
in
other area
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another area
other areas
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as well.
On the other hand
, learning a foreign
lanuage
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language
is greatly important to achieve
career
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a career
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goal and travel to
foreign
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a foreign
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land. If
people
can speak
bilingual
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a bilingual
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language
, they can easily find
the
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job.
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However
,
they
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if they
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do not have
the
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other
skills
,
employer
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employers
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will consider to put in the interview list because
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they have
a
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great social
skill
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skills
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. In my country, bilingual speakers are very essential in
workplace
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the workplace
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, many foreigners come to invest and there are numerous foreign
company
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companies
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. And they pay very good salary so
people
regrad
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regard
the
language
as
a
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having a
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big impact
to improve
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on improving
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career
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a career
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.
Moreover
, it is
great
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a great
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benefit
while
we are travelling to foreign.
People
can adapt
their
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cultures and
also
very
convienient
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convenient
to communicate with local
people
.
On the other hand
,
language
is not only for
career
and travelling but
also
it can
imporve
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improve
social
skills
. English is
common
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the common
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language
in the world so we can
get
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many friends from different countries. And, there are numerous social media platforms
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popular, so it is very convenient to see diverse
people
and exchange cultures and
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
According to
my experience,
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am a very shy person to
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in front of other
people
, so
i
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join
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the social platform and
i
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have improved my social
skills
. Social
skill
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skills
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is
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highly important because
it
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they
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can gain many benefits for individuals.
To conclude
,
people
should study foreign
language
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languages
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that will be very beneficial for
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their career
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career
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careers
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, travel to other countries and social
skills
.
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