The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.
The given image
apperently
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apparently
illustrates different phases of carbonated drink production.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are a total of five stages,
beginnig
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beginning
with
water
purifying, and culminating in packaging. Looking more closely at the diagram, in the first
stage
raw
water
is filtered, and
then
water
softener is added with chemicals. Afterwards,
this
mixture is pumped into a man-made case in order to
heating
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(electric heaters are used for
this
stage
), evaporation and carbonation. Obtained carbonated
water
is canalized to a mixing tank,
this
stage
is named as
stage
3, and
also
mixing
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the mixing
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phase. Owing to a
specailly-designed
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specially designed
mechanism, syrup, flavour and
coloring
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are added into the carbonated
water
. After
filtered
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the mixture again, the liquid is poured into bottles. In the subsequent
stage
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these bottles are placed into boxes, and when the packaging process
completed
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is completed
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they
carried
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are carried
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by lorries.
Finally
, they are delivered to a supermarket, where they are sold
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