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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #research #organizations
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Governments
 funding has been a debatable subject in
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recent years. People argue that
goverments
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governments
government
 should be the
sponser
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sponsor
entinty
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entity
 in funding and controlling
scientifc
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scientific
research
. It is agreed that the
goverment
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government
 should have
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full control
in
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 the
funcding
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funding
as well as
 the
cotrolling
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controlling
 factors.
This
 is because
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scientific
research
 costs
huge
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 amount of money and it benefits the country as a whole.
Firstly
,
scientifc
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scientific
research
 over the years
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 known that it costs a lot of money. For
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example
,
scientifc
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scientific
research
 on
atrifical
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artificial
intellegance
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intelligence
 will require a huge number of expensive high performing computers to handle the huge amount of data processing. Sadly, the private sector does not have enough
resourses
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resources
 to purchase these computers.
Therfore
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Therefore
,
this
 makes it clear that private organizations are not capable of funding
such
researches
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.
Secondly
, it is
widly
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widely
 known the
benfits
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benefits
 that
scientifc
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scientific
research
 can
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 to the country.
For instance
, countries have been rotating on taking the chance to host Expo which is a
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 event where
contruies
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countries
centuries
 showcase
invention
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 and
research
.
This
 is a great way for countries to
attrach
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attract
attach
 a lot of
tourits
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tourists
 which
make
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 the
conuty
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county
country
 a way of income.
This
 is a quality that the private
secotr
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sector
 is unwilling to fund nor hots.
Thus
,
this
 makes it clear that
private
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sectors
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sector
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 will not be able to meet the needs of
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well funded
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scientifc
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scientific
research
. In conclusion,
due to
 the high cost of the process of
scientifc
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scientific
research
 and the
benfits
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benefits
 it holds for
goverments
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governments
.
It is clear that
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 of having the private
sectors
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 fund and control
the
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scientifc
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scientific
research
 cannot be supported.
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grammar
Pay close attention to spelling and grammar. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'govermnets', 'sponser', 'funcding', 'cotrolling', 'scientifc', 'exmaple', 'atrifical', 'intellegance', 'resourses', 'benfits', 'contruies', 'tourits', 'conuty') that could be easily avoided with proofreading. Correct usage is essential for task success and to communicate your ideas clearly.

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