Some people believe that to become successful in sports, one should have a natural talent. Others, however, think that perseverance and practice are more crucial to success. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
I should mention that naturally gifted people can achieve success in different
sports
easily. However
, some people believe that hard work and persistence have an essential role in the successful careers of sportsmen. I will discuss both sides of these statements in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, individuals who have natural talents or abilities are luckier than others and achieve a great victory in any sports
competition. For instance
, Pele was one of the most successful football players throughout the world achieving three World Cups in a row with his personal aptitude for playing a ball. In addition
, the enthusiasm of sports
players for it at an early age is another key factor which leads them to the top level of the rock. Unfortunately, there are quite a few innate people who cannot make the most of themselves as well as
a lack of self-confidence and chances. Therefore
, governments should focus on this
issue and subsidise them under any conditions.
Nevertheless
, it is commonly known that there are many different types of competitors who have achieved their goals in sports
by training hard and regularly. I mean that regular practice helps a person to become much more professional in his or her own field. At the same time, with the help of a coach's instructions and motivation as well as
strong public support including parents' encouragement, they can enhance their self-assuredness and succeed in obtaining accomplishments. To take an example, Cristiano Ronaldo has worked on himself persistently and devoted himself to soccer since his childhood. As a result
, he has set record-breaking results and acquired a number of medals and various cups.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is vitally important for athletes to keep in shape and follow strict discipline besides
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