Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too.​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ​

Some say that it is more beneficial for managers
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decisions
alone,
while
others would argue that it is important to involve
employees
in the process of
decision
-making.
This
essay argues
although
it is
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process of deciding things alone,
employees
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employees'
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contributions could bring more benefits to the
decision
. One
person
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decision
can be useful in certain
circumtances
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circumstances
. If the
company
operates
in
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larger
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a larger
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scale, it is hard to take
everyperson's
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every person's
opinion because everyone has
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different ideas which take time to combine and make things more complicated. Sometimes some
decisions
must be made in a short period,
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challenges to expect
someones'
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answer in that time.
For example
, if the
company
has a limited budget, and
employees
sugesting
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suggesting
a potential improvement in the equipment which requires a
significicant
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significant
amount of investment. In
this
situtation
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situation
, the manager could make
decision
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decisions
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by himself or herself. Because
,
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they tend to ask a
continious
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continuous
improvements regardless of the
company
's financial condition.
On the other hand
, if managers
instill
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the ideas of the
employees
in their
decisions
, it would bring many benefits
such
as less
riskier
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, and more improvements in the products and services because they have already gathered a variety of real-time experiences through their jobs.
Although
discussing with
colleaques
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colleagues
requires
a
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extensive amount of time, they might provide the most efficient and reliable answers to the problems.
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, involving
employees
in the
decisions
makes them more
resonsible
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responsible
for their jobs, and more initiatives would be derived from them.
As a result
, the
company
's
overall
performance will be improved. Both
staffs
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and managers become happy which will create
positive
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environment in the workplace. In conclusion,
although
it is beneficial
of
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a manager making
decision
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alone in some instances, getting ideas and suggestions from
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colleagues
would bring more benefits.
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Make sure your introduction clearly introduces the topic and both views. A defined thesis statement at the end of the introduction would strengthen your essay.
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Work on a clear and concise conclusion that summarises your essay's main points and reiterates your own opinion.

Your opinion

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