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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The diagrams illustrate the current
sport
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sports
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center's
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centre's
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 set up of a university and the way it is going to appear following a planned expansion.
Overall
, what stands out from the plans is that the
sport
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center
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centre
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 is planned to become an entirely indoor facility since extensions are
due to
 be
build
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 to the east and
west
, which will supplant the
center's
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 outdoor courts. At present, the
sport
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center
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centre
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 houses an entrance area with a reception, to the east and
west
 of which are doorways which lead to the sitting area and changing rooms respectively. These flank a
25 meter
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 pool, and north of
this
 is a gym. Outdoor courts
lied
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lay
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 to the east and
west
 of
building
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the building
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. After the redevelopment, the entrance area will accommodate a
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 to the
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southwestern
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south-western
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southwestern
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 corner and a cafe in the
south east
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 of the corner, and these will back on to new changing rooms.
while
 the western outdoor court will have been replaced by a leisure pool, the eastern court will have been turned into
sports
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a sports
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 hall
west
 of two new dance studios.
Finally
, the gym will have been extended
eastwood
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eastward
 toward these.
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task achievement
Ensure that all features of the diagrams are accurately described and compared. Include measurements and relative positions for clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to structure your response effectively. This will guide the reader through your description without confusion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introductory sentence that sets the context for the diagrams, and a concluding sentence that summarizes the main changes or developments.

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