You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter Introduce yourself Say why you are interested in this club Ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, members, costs.

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Dear Sir or Madam My name is Mehribon and I study at Cambridge

college

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College

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.I am writing

this

letter to express my interest in joining your

sports

club. I am a

sports

person and I do sport every day .

Moreover

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sports

are beneficial

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to my

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health and it keeps me fit.Unfortunately ,our college does not have

sports

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a sports

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club .I saw an advertisement

your

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for your

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sports

club and your location is near my college. I would like to get more information.

Firstly

,I would like to know how big

gym

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the gym

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area

and

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what types of equipment are available .

Secondly

, I would be grateful if you could tell me about the facilities. How many people

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are at

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your place and how much does it cost? I would appreciate it if you could send the details to my email. I hope you will consider my request. I would like to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Mehribon

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8 paragraphs

151 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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