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Some people think that secondary school should add international news as a subject; others think that it is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views.

#people #school #news #waste #time
It is often considered that a few individuals reckon that high
school
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schools
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 should add international
news
 as a
subject
.
Whereas
, many
population
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populations
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 believe that it is a
wastage
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waste
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 of precious time.
Thus
,
this
 essay will elaborate on both notions which
further
 leads to a logical conclusion. Commencing, the contemporary era, there are various exams based on the abroad information and
this
subject
 will enhance their knowledge
although
 it will ameliorate the intelligence level of an individual.
Moreover
, the overseas
news
also
make
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makes
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 aware of new technologies
as well as
 the techniques which each can apply in their daily lives.
For instance
, the "University of Queensland" in Australia added a
subject
 of current affairs which is
benefial
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beneficial
 for the generation. Probing ahead, some populace trust that adding
a
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news
a piece of news
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news
 in the area of study is useless because
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 generation has already been engaged in manyfold tasks and whose dream is different and
not
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does not
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 require any exam
than
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then
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 it's not
worthy
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worth
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to learn
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learning
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additional
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the additional
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subject
.
However
, the modern world is advanced enough to gain
the
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apply
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data from other mediums and
also
 social
platform
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platforms
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 are available in which the youths are keenly active.
For example
, the "Times of China" illustrates the
wastage
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waste
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 of international study in their field. In a nutshell, the institutions should perform
an extra classes
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an extra class
extra classes
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 for the juveniles and teach the importance of country
news
.
Instead
 of adding
subject
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a subject
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, it should be
an
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apply
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optional for the students.
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structure
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each part should serve its purpose: introduce the topic, present arguments for both views, and summarize your discussion.
coherence
Remember to provide clear topic sentences for each paragraph and make sure every sentence after that supports the main point. This helps in creating logical and cohesive paragraphs.
examples
Use concrete examples to support your arguments. While you provided examples, ensuring they are specific and directly related to the points you're making strengthens your essay.
grammar
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to ensure clarity. Avoid overly complex sentences that may confuse the reader.
balance
Consider both views equally and provide a balanced discussion before reaching a conclusion. This gives the impression of a well-considered and comprehensive analysis of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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