Car ownership has increased so rapidly over past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?
The number of personal cars has accelerated very fast within the
last
thirty decades which is observed in many towns.As a result
,the world is suffering a problem which is traffic
jams.I, personally face this
problem in my daily life and I think it is a barrier to developing countries. So,the government should take the necessary steps to handle this
heavy traffic
.
The recent census has proved that the population has doubled. So,the increasing number of people need more and more transport systems for their livelihood. But,the roads and number of vehicles are almost the same.That’s why,people buy their own cars for their purposes. As a result
, the roads have always traffic
congestion. No one can move easily. For example
-students cannot able to attend their class in just time.More importantly, patients who need emergency treatment are also
stuck in traffic
. Sometimes, some die before arriving hospital.So,it is an issue that is
fully wasted time.I think it is a common scenario in most countries especially
in peak times.
Add the comma(s)
, especially
Moreover
,traffic
jam is an obstacle to economic development. So the government should be alert. For instance
- providing an available transport system.Secondly
, training facilities should be arrenged
with facilities and Correct your spelling
arranged
traffic
police should be recruited more and more. Additionally
,traffic
signals should be distributed to the busy areas as
people can move safely.Correct word choice
so
Moreover
, the damaged road should be repaired as soon as possible. Last
but not least,a well-planned traffic
rules-regulation is compulsory and the punishment should be declered
if anyone Correct your spelling
declared
disobey
these rules.That makes a sound Change the verb form
disobeys
traffic
system,I guess.
In conclusion,Traffic
jams are wasting part of our life
.But it cannot be controlled overnight, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
along with
the government we all should be aware of this
topic.otherwise
, life will become mor
Correct your spelling
more
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coherence cohesion
Your essay provides a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, to enhance coherence and cohesion, consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas and paragraphs. Additionally, establishing clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph can guide the reader more effectively through your argument.
task achievement
You've made an attempt to address the topic by discussing the problems caused by traffic congestion and proposing solutions. To improve task achievement, your essay would benefit from a fuller development of ideas, especially in the conclusion which ends abruptly. Also, ensure that your response directly addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing how true you find the statement about cities becoming 'one big traffic jam' and offering more detailed measures for governments to discourage car use.