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You are work working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In you letter explain why you want to take time off work give details of amount of time you need suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

#work #company #time #manager #amount
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my grandmother’s
birthday
. My grandma’s
birthday
 is on March 12th. We wanted to celebrate my grandmother’s
birthday
together with
 our family, and the whole family is going to celebrate her 60th
birthday
. I spent most of my youth with them, and I am their
favorite
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 grandchildren.
Firstly
, I need almost one week off from 9 March to 15 March as we need to do a number of organizing
such
 as inviting our relatives and friends, booking the dinner place and so on. But I may not make it in time because the distance is too far. I plan to work online for a week. I leave my work for a week online by email every day at 19:00.
Furthermore
, I will complete my all pending work, when I
will
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apply
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come back to the office. I hope you will understand my situation and accept my request. Yours faithfully, Samandar
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structure
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Introduce the reason for writing in the first paragraph, expand on details in the body, and summarise or politely request understanding in the conclusion.
coherence
When discussing the reason for your time off and details of your absence, try to connect ideas more smoothly. For example, use linking words or phrases ('Thus', 'In order to', 'Therefore') to enhance flow between sentences.
tone
Try to maintain a respectful and professional tone throughout the letter. Phrases like 'I am their favorite grandchildren' might appear informal. Consider rephrasing for a more professional tone.
task achievement
Ensure your request and reason for absence are clearly stated early in the letter for immediate clarity. Details about coverage of work should also be specific and realistic.
grammar
Check for grammatical errors and improve punctuation. Consistent use of past and present tenses, as well as careful attention to sentence structure, can increase the legibility and professionalism of your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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