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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/she has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * give details of the course you took at the University * explain why you recommend the University * give some advice about how to apply

#friend #course #university #advice
Dear Joy, How are you? I hope life is treating you kindly. I am thrilled after receiving your letter seeking advice on admission
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 my
university
. I will definitely recommend you to take
this
course
, which I did. Let me explain
you
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briefly about
this
course
.
Firstly
, as you know, the name of
this
course
 is Computer Science. The major subjects of
this
course
 are Java script, Python and Calculous;
Additionally
, It has two extra subjects
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recreational exercise and environmental science. So, it has five subjects in total. The duration of
this
 program is 4 years including
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 internship. The reason for my recommendation is the quality of knowledge
this
university
 provides;
In addition
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 faculty here is supportive in nature.
Nevertheless
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 arranges placement interviews quarterly, which will be beneficial for your future job. To apply for admission, visit
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 website, ' www.xyzuniversity.com. You will find one portal for new admissions you can apply there; Alternatively, you can visit
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 directly, after going straight for two meters you will find a reception desk
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 you can ask
there
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for guidance. I hope my suggestions were helpful to you. If you need any
further
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 don't hesitate to reach me. All the best, Maria
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task achievement
To further enhance your letter, you might consider adding more personal anecdotes or examples that illustrate why you found the course valuable. This could make your recommendation more compelling.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, consider linking ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Using transitional phrases can help create a more fluid connection between your discussion of the course details, your reasons for recommending the university, and the advice on how to apply.
coherence cohesion
Pay close attention to minor grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. For instance, 'Java script' should be written as 'JavaScript', and 'Calculous' should be 'Calculus'. Ensuring accuracy in these details contributes to the overall professionalism of your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • internship opportunities
  • networking events
  • career services
  • personal statement
  • deadline
  • admissions office
  • recommendation letters
  • portfolio
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