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You work for an international company and you need some time off to attend a family celebration. Write a letter to the company's manager. In your letter: -give details of the celebration - explain the reason why you need time off - suggest a way to have your work done during that time

#work #company #time #celebration #manager #-give #reason
Dear Shayla, I am writing
this
 letter to you to request a one-week vacation starting
from
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on
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 March 1, 2024,
ending
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and ending
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 on March 8, 2024,
due to
 the marriage of my aunt's daughter, which is going to be held at the Green Garden, in Dubay.
This
occurence
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occurrence
 is extremely vital for all the family members. And
this
 is
also
 an opportunity for all family members to get together
for
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to
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 spend some time with each other. I would like to apply for at least a
one-weeks
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week
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 off so I can help my cousin make
arrangement
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 for
this
 occasion and spend some time with my family. I have already booked the first available flight to Dubai and return tickets as well. I will arrive back in
the
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Uzbekistan in the early morning of the 8th of March and I
would
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 be able to start working the same day. Please consider
this
 extreme situation I am facing at the moment and allow me to have
this
 time off work. Yours sincerely, Bayramoy
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Structure and Flow
Be clear and organized in your request. A good structure includes a clear opening statement, detailed body paragraphs, and a polite closing. Each paragraph should carry a single clear idea, linked smoothly to the others.
Grammar and Style
Remember to check for grammatical errors and ensure sentence variety for a better flow. Active voice is preferred for clarity.
Detail and Authenticity
Be specific about your contribution to the event or the reason why your presence is necessary, providing more details can strengthen your request.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence, use connectors or transitional phrases to ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next.
Responsibility and Planning
To enhance the letter, consider including how you plan to manage or make up for work missed during your absence. This demonstrates responsibility and consideration for your work duties.
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