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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate
avarage
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average
 percentages of three types of nutrients in a normal meal which are bad for
the
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health if consumed too much.
Overall
, the sodium and saturated fat
mostly
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are mostly
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 contained in the
dinner
while
 in
snaks
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snacks
 added sugar is found to be the most.
Furthermore
, breakfast contains the least amount of all three
elemants
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elements
. In detail,
sodiam
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sodium
 content is highest in
dinner
 with posted 43% value
while
 it is lowest in breakfast and
snaks
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snacks
 with 14% equal values ,and nearly
one
 third in the
dinner
.
Similarly
, saturated fat
contend
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content
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 is
also
 highest
in
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at
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the
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dinner
 with a recorded value of slightly more than
one third
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one-third
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compared to all the meals.
However
, nearly
two fifths
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two-fifths
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 of sugar
contains
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is contained
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 in the
snaks
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tanks
snacks
 with slightly more than
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of it in the
dinner
,
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 and approximately
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of it in the lunch.
Likewise
, similar to
other
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the other
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 two nutrients sugar
contend
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content
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 is lowest in
the
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apply
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breakfast.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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