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Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the avarage percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the avarage percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #avarage #percentages #meals #three #nutrients #summarise #information #features #comparisons
According to
 the charts, three types of nutrients
contain
Wrong verb form
are contained
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 in typical meals,
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar. The charts above
,
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apply
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describes
Correct subject-verb agreement
describe
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 the
avarage
Correct your spelling
average
percentage
 of
sodium
, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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.
Firstly
, The typical meals of
sodium
 nutrients have a higher
percentage
 when consumed
in
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at
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dinner
 than
breakfast
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at breakfast
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,
lunch
 and snacks.
Additionally
, when
sodium
 consumed in
lunch
have
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has
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 the second highest
in
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apply
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percentage
 following snacks and
dinner
 equal in value.
Secondly
, saturated fats have a higher
percentage
 consumed
in
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at
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dinner
 following
lunch
 as the second highest.
In addition
, saturated fats nutrients consumed in snacks as the third highest and the lowest
is
Correct your spelling
in
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 breakfast.
Lastly
, consuming added sugar
in
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at
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lunch
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 higher
percentage
 than
in
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at
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dinner
.
Therefore
, making it the
dinner
 as the second highest in
percentage
,
following
Wrong verb form
followed
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 the
lunch
 as the third highest and breakfast as the lowest.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, percentage, dinner, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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