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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to wor for a company or organistaion. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days many
people
 may prefer to work or be self-employed
instead
 of working for
companys
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companies
 or
organistaions
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organisations
organisation
,
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have
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 some disadvantages and advantages.In
this
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i
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 will put forward some of the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed these days. many
people
 started to choose to be self-employed
due to
 some reasons.
However
,
this
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have it is
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 own disadvantages.Being self-employed means that you do not have
stable
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 income.
For example
 artists or freelancers,for a period of
time
 they might have 0 income or low income.That will affect them in many ways.
For example
, if they have families or rent to pay,in that period of
time
 they will struggle with their financial situation.
On the other hand
,
people
 choose to be
self employed
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self-employed
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due to
 their freedom and
time
.they prefer to be in control and be bosses
their
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 own work.
for
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 example, many
atrists
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artists
 like to work at night or for
short
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a short
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time
 without any
reponspilities
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responsibilities
.
Furthermore
, they might
prerfer
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prefer
refer
spend
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much
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a lot of
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time
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more time
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 on other things
such
 as families,
hoppies
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hippies
hobbies
,
sports
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and sports
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. In
conclosuion
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conclusion
, some
people
statred
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started
 to be
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self-employed
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self employed
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self-employed
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 because of their desire to be free and spend more
time
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focusing
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focus
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 on other things.
However
,that may
effect
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affect
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 their financial situation in many aspects and they will face some financial problems.
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Introduction Improvement
Begin the essay with a clear introduction that presents the topic and your stance on it. Make sure your thesis statement is precise and introduces your main points effectively.
Paragraph Development
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Coherence Improvement
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Use of Examples
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Task Response Improvement
To improve task achievement, ensure you address all parts of the prompt in a balanced manner. Discuss both advantages and disadvantages of self-employment with clear and comprehensive ideas.
Grammar and Accuracy
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. This will make your writing more professional and easier to understand.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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