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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using cars?

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It is true nowadays
vehicles
 belonging has greatly increased over the past 3 decades and caused a huge traffic congestion issue.
Governments
 should take action to reduce
vehicle
 belonging,
such
 as making
rule
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rules
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 for
vehicles
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vehicle
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 belonging and
develops
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developing
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 more proper public
transportation
.
To begin
 with, the only party that can make rules
are
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is
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 the
governments
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government
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.
Firstly
, the
governments
 can make rules about progressive tax about belonging
vehicles
 more than two for every family.
Secondly
, the
governments
 can restrict the maximum
vechiel
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vehicle
 production in a year for
vehicle
 production
company
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companies
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.
On the other hand
, the
governments
 should make proper public
transportation
.
For instance
, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
make
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 proper public
transportation
,
then
 the citizen will choose to move from one place to another place by public
transportation
 than their own
vehicle
.
To conclude
, it is true that the growing of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 belonging has become a cause
for
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of
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 traffic
jam issue
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jams issues
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 and the solution to that,
the
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is the
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governments
 can make
a rules
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rules
a rule
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 about
vehicles
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vehicle
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 belonging tax and develop more proper public
transportations
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transportation
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 for their citizen.
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