many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, it has become far more normal for lots of
countries
to show a longer life expectancy than in the past. While
there may be some benefits for current society, this
can contribute to having exact problems for the governments, I think.On the one hand, having lots of elderly folk in our community who do not wish to learn their own history may be useful. It might be important to prevent the community from losing its imagination about Marvels in history, whose heroism still provokes the young generation to be the leaders of their society. Another one is to maintain customs passed down from the past until now as a result
of historical events. There are unchanged traditions, such
as being respectful to ancestors, where old people live more.
In spite of the arguments above, this
hard situation brings several problems to the government. Firstly
, living longer has a detrimental contribution to the rate of unemployment in most countries
, which comes at the expense of increasing the expenditure on these provisions. Some European countries
are now, for example
, experiencing an increase in the proportion of individuals who have lost their ability to work compared to having babies. They are facing precise difficulties related to the lack of a work forceMoreover, the second issue is being given money that the authority can invest in other more useful sectors, such
as education and the military, to develop the intelligence and safety of countries
for people in retirement. It is evident that dividing investment into this
category comes at a huge cost to a country's budget. As an outcome, this
condition can cause the government to not focus on other primary fields anymore. These two examples can easily explain why this
case has many disadvantages rather than merits.In conclusion, the ageing population seems to have some important sides, such
as being aware of historical characteristics and protecting from losing customs for our generation; rising unemployed people degree; and having a reduction in countries
budget, which can be underpinned by unresolved issues for the government.Submitted by amuhammedov665 on
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task response
Ensure clear and precise thesis statement and topic sentences to guide the reader throughout the essay.
task response
Provide a balanced analysis of both the advantages and disadvantages in your discussion, ensuring all points are well-supported with clear and relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas by using a variety of transition words and phrases effectively between paragraphs and sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Develop your main points with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite